No. Your prose flows. Your words are well chosen. But I get it. Good writers are like house-proud homeowners throwing a party. They worry about specks of dust in places their guests would never look. And even if they did, wouldn’t notice. Keep up the good work. I like to be entertained (Because, of course, it’s all about me.)
I write more non-fiction than fiction. However, I did write one piece that is similar to Death of a Mayfly. My protagonist, like yours, is a young woman dealing with her circumstances. Although her concerns are not as expansive. Here’s a link, if you’re interested. (I hope links left in the comment stream are clickable)
Wow, very well done. And also “Charlotte Cavendish” is a name I was drawn to immediately (my daughter is a Charlotte and we’ve both grown up submerged in a life in Avonlea).
I usually write fiction, but lately have written a lot more non in prep for a memoir I hope to start in a few weeks. I’ve been sending off short stories to publications as prep, but telling stories about my life flows really easily. It’s been a lot of fun.
Good luck with your memoir. Every writer should write one - even if not for publication. As you do not have to worry about the plot or mis-en-scène (you already know it), it is an uncluttered opportunity to hone your narrative skills. And you will be amazed how many lost memories you retrieve.
Now I will wait for your next piece, fiction or non.
Really enjoyed it and want to know more about this family. The mothers ways of communicating with her daughter were all the more powerful due to her deaf and muteness. Women's voices are often overlooked or silenced in the world. The mother character brings a spotlight to how silence can be powerful and still communicate volumes.
Good stuff. “Many edits...” That’s the crux of it. Writing is cutting the slab out of the rock. Editing is creating the sculpture. Well played.
😂did you find mistakes? I’ve been editing this for years…
No. Your prose flows. Your words are well chosen. But I get it. Good writers are like house-proud homeowners throwing a party. They worry about specks of dust in places their guests would never look. And even if they did, wouldn’t notice. Keep up the good work. I like to be entertained (Because, of course, it’s all about me.)
😆well thank you. I’ll continue to write stories on your behalf
You’re welcome, Ellie. Thank you.
I write more non-fiction than fiction. However, I did write one piece that is similar to Death of a Mayfly. My protagonist, like yours, is a young woman dealing with her circumstances. Although her concerns are not as expansive. Here’s a link, if you’re interested. (I hope links left in the comment stream are clickable)
https://vocal.media/psyche/a-teaspoon-of-sand
Wow, very well done. And also “Charlotte Cavendish” is a name I was drawn to immediately (my daughter is a Charlotte and we’ve both grown up submerged in a life in Avonlea).
I usually write fiction, but lately have written a lot more non in prep for a memoir I hope to start in a few weeks. I’ve been sending off short stories to publications as prep, but telling stories about my life flows really easily. It’s been a lot of fun.
Thank you for your positive review.
Good luck with your memoir. Every writer should write one - even if not for publication. As you do not have to worry about the plot or mis-en-scène (you already know it), it is an uncluttered opportunity to hone your narrative skills. And you will be amazed how many lost memories you retrieve.
Now I will wait for your next piece, fiction or non.
I’ve read this chapter but it never fails to make me shudder. Excellent writing, Ellie.
Thank you, lots of underlying purity culture in these words. Took me 300 pages to figure that out.
Really enjoyed it and want to know more about this family. The mothers ways of communicating with her daughter were all the more powerful due to her deaf and muteness. Women's voices are often overlooked or silenced in the world. The mother character brings a spotlight to how silence can be powerful and still communicate volumes.
So much of this story is about communicating in silence in various ways. I'm really glad you enjoyed it and I hope I can share the whole thing soon!
Wow! Lot different from when I first read it last year? Two years ago? Nice work!!!!!
Thanks! Many edits…
That's where the money is made and the real work begins! Glad to see it!